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Torn between two loves... torn between two brothers. Is walking away always the easy choice? Alabama thought life was hard living with her single, loose, and always ready for another party mother... that was until her mama was sent to rehab and Alabama was shipped off to live with her mom's best friend from high school... no one ever told her that she'd also be living with two boys... well really men that were her of her age. Joshua was the youngest brother, only a year older than Alabama's age of eighteen. He quickly became her friend, best friend, but he always wanted more, something that Alabama couldn't offer him. Hunter, just look under the word brooding, handsome, rock star, and a picture of Hunter would surely show up. He wanted nothing to do with Alabama, ignored her every chance that he got. But was that his way of not getting close to someone who could break his heart? Alabama never asked for the heartbreak or to cause a family rift living with two brothers, both of whom loved her in their own sp

Amber's mind shut down entirely at his touch. For a split second, she stiffened, wondering if this was really happening or just a figment of her imagination. But when Hunter moved slightly and grazed her lips again, harder, a second time, Amber was lost, her brain turning to a puddle heap once more. His first kiss was light as a feather, just a mere brush of their lips. Amber barely felt a thing. His second kiss was questioning, inquiring. Asking if it would be all right and if it so, would Amber reciprocate? And she did so by parting her lips, inviting him in. Hunter maneuvered in on her signal, sinking deep and demanding her mouth, her tongue, her very soul. With his lips, he teased, with his tongue he chased, and Amber could do nothing but obey. When she tried to turn, he simply chased her mouth back, capturing her lips once more with a tilt of his head. His kisses were overwhelming. He was overwhelming, taking everything she offered and more.

Lexana Rivera, a 24 year old independent woman was the only guardian of her nephew Travis Rivera. Also he was the only she had left in her family. Luckily being promoted aiming a good pay to take care of her nephew, Lexana moved to a big city happily having no idea how that job was going to turn into her biggest nightmare. Master Xavier Aiden was a man of heavy arrogance and perfection, seemingly unknown to the knowledge of his son's existence master Xavier finds Lexana as a woman of a lot of secrets working as his secretary. What will happen if he finds out about his long lost son to be with his secretary?

Alex and Allie have been pushed into a life together, with their Moms as lifelong friends you would think that they will grow up to be friends as well, but you'd be wrong. Alex and Allie hated the life they were forced into, and they show it by tricking and pranking each other. But one day a prank leads into something more, something neither of them thought was possible. They will either make fun of each other like always or admit that how they really feel is no laughing matter.

Cassidy Jenkins hadn’t seen her childhood friend, Daniella Thompson, since their high school days. When she suddenly receives a call saying that she is coming for a visit, Cassidy is overjoyed. But Daniella has learned of Cassidy’s recent marriage to Tyler Jenkins, and is jealous of Cassidy’s happiness. Daniella tries to come between Cassidy and Tyler by seducing Cassidy’s husband, Tyler. When Cassidy discovers Daniella’s secret and the real reason Daniella is here, will Cassidy forgive her friend?

this short story is about yourself acceptance. we should be always with us no matter what happens, if we are with yourself than the rest of world must have accept us.

Kiara sat at her small kitchen table literally bumping her head into the wood. Several times. Why the hell did she agree to spend four days in a fucking island with loaded snobs she knew nothing about? Of course, she didn’t know exactly what she signed up for before she accepted his offer, but she knew it came from the guy who sent her to fucking jail and said yes anyway. And based on what? A hunch. Something so intangible and arbitrary she would be unable to explain even to her dad, who was always a firm believer in following your gut. But she saw it, right there hiding behind his handsome stoic façade. He was… desperate. -- All Kiara has in life is her passion for art. Her career as a circus performer is a constant search for real attention, for people to see through the veil of plain entertainment. Chris Wright is the heir to one of the most profitable construction empires of the city, but to get to the top he needs the approval of his authoritarian father. Who knows what will happen when art meets busin

She never thought about her wedding day to be like this.She had offered her heart to the man and he simply crushed it before leaving her there all shattered.And now here she is sitting as a woman of an unknown Man whom she had not even met before. Aarohi Basu~ A simple girl with innocent heart, carrying a dream of marrying the guy she had fall in love with over the period of their engagement, never knew that she will be abandoned by the same guy just few hours before their marriage.And now she had to marry the guy she didn't knew the name of. Advaith Abhiraj Singh Khurana~A shrewd businessman and mumma's boy, went with his family to attend his father's best friend's daughter's marriage, unaware of the storm waiting for him.He was shocked when he got to know that the marriage he has came to attend will turn into his own marriage, that too when he is already in love with another girl. One is heartbroken and other is already in love with someone else.How will their love story bloom in such conditions??

Ten years ago, Kent Oliver Stone broke Lucy Mason's heart. Then they randomly reunited at a bar and hooked up. Lucy thought her dream man had finally come back into her life, but the situation is far from perfect. Kent was still married and when she showed up on her first day of work, he turned out to be her new boss as well. Is she willing to be his mistress just to keep him in her life?

This is Book #2 of Shiver, please read the first one before going into this book, it would help you to experience it better. Thank you. Charlene Ludlow had always wanted to leave the small town of Bluebridge to a big city. She finally had the courage to visit Goldstone for the summer of 1998. What was suppose to be a summer vacation turned into an altering long term plan which will change the course of her life. Tommy's dream to try his luck in the film industry had brought the couple to enter a lifestyle they knew nothing of. Young and inexperienced, they were caught in the web of deceit of the most influential people in the industry. As their relationship suffered the strain of the Neon Dreams, they found themselves stuck between a rock and a hard place and fighting their way to get out.

While her friends have already settled down, Plume still could not decide what she wanted to do with her life. She believed that as long as she was self-sufficient, she'd be fine even without a partner. She had finally decided to step out of her comfort zone, leave the country, and find her fortune. But to do that, she must help Rebeka sell her house and take her share. One day, a man named Sheen appeared at her door. He had slender eyes, a pretty face, and a gentle voice. He wanted the house, and Plume must put her best foot forward to convince him to buy it. And suddenly, Plume found wanting Sheen for herself. She did not see that coming. But that was not big of a problem, right? She already had plans to stick with. And love could not even change her mind. Besides, Sheen already had his eyes on a woman who looked like an angel sent from above.

Knock Knock! Knock Knock! Who's there? Would you really like to know? A Gothic short story for all those interested.

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Nina Dern Miller it is a simple and easy going girl. At 17, she gave her virginity to a stranger she met at a club. Now at 27 years, she met the guy who took her heart but he's engaged to her friend. Will she break friendship or mend the relationship? Michael Vincent Thompson, the first of the three boys in the Thompson's family and the heir to the Thompson's Empire, currently the CEO of the Thompson's Empire is a ruthless billionaire who has everything that money could buy and an heiress of the Mason's Media Group as a fiancee. But a night with a naive virgin girl change his view of women. Will he risk his inheritance for a naive virgin girl or Will he marry an heiress and expand the family business. READ AND FIND OUT!!!!!!!!!

Life is certainly not a fairy tale, but when true love appears, life seems like a fairy tale... *************** Yivanna was the princess of Zerobia. The infamous country, for it's Impoverishment and corrupted politics. Belonging from a country like Zerobia and on the top of that, having a manipulative aunt with crude mentality, Yivanna was forced to shut her dreams and bury them inside her heart. Soon, her marriage has been fixed with their neighbor county prince Xavier Kingston. She could not endure that and ran away from home for Siyerendell. She even disguised herself as a male, to live up the new and her most yearning emancipation. However, in her way, she faced an accident, which led her to Meliheniya, one of the strongest and beautiful country on earth, surrounded by the Meliheniyan and half of the Siyerendell sea, this country was ruled by the powerful King, Victor Val-de-Marne. Victor was not only the king, he was also the heartthrob of the women in Meliheniya and even other countries. But

The Sequinned Potential is a squad of heroes with exceptional powers, formed with the intention of defeating evil forces. But now as a dark wizard threatens the humankind, the squad finds itself in deep peril, especially when the sacred green crystal that made them invincible is stolen from their keep. With a desperate attempt to recover the crystal and save the humankind, they need more warriors; people with supernatural powers as themselves. Destiny and Cara are cousins. They are like best of friends but both of them have been hiding a secret from their mothers; Cara can see things that nobody can, whereas, Destiny possesses an extreme sense of alertness and flexibility. When a mysterious stranger follows them around and informs them that they belong to Meyercliffe and are a part of a squad called ‘The Sequinned Potential’, they are completely thrown off-guard. With a world unknown waiting for them, will they be able to become a part of The Sequinned Potential? Together, side by side, with their uniqu

Lucille never thought that she’d fall in love with Steven—who happened to be a priest. She knew that she’s in big trouble, and her heart is at stake. Whatever her reasons are, Lucille has to avoid Steven. But, how could she tell her heart to unlove the person that showed her how beautiful love could be? While dealing with a broken heart, Lucille met the hottest celebrity in town, Carlson Santillan, with his rumored son. Because of that encounter, the man offered her a high-paying job—to be his son’s nanny. At first, Lucille was hesitant, but a bright idea came to her mind. She’ll be his son’s babysitter but in one condition, Carlson will pretend as her boyfriend in front of Steven.

Kyle is the hockey team's star. All the girls' eyes are fixed on him. His eyes are straying somewhere else. Jeremy's the weird new kid on the backseat, always dressed in black. What's so special about him, though that Kyle can't stop looking at him? And Jeremy's best friend- Eva is in the biggest trouble she wasn't prepared for when she meets Jeremy's brother Nathan. He loves fast cars, kick-boxing, and basically, everything that’s bad for Eva. And that changes her whole life in ways she never thought possible. The story of unlikely friendships, falling in love with the wrong people and knowing you are not like the others.

Waking up from a coma, Mihara found herself lying on a luxurious bed beside a handsome man. She couldn’t remember what happened to her or how did she end up here. Before she could leave the bed, the man woke up and checked on her worriedly. As he stood up and revealed his nakedness in front of her, Mihara was dumbfounded. And, why he’s calling her his wife? She doesn’t even know him!

I felt his breath tickling my ear, sending shivers down my spine, “Pretend for a while. I will tell you everything later”, and just like that my little bubble burst, sending me crashing back to reality. **** Amanda Moore had left behind her past when she divorced Dominic Giovanni and settled in New York. But 5 years later her past waltzes back in and makes her already frazzled life even more chaotic.

Yoyong is a place which finds mention in folklore as the hotbed of black magic and sorcery. A group of youths who have joined the Veerbhadra Institute of Physical Training in Soanpur decide to visit its many places of religious and historical significance along with the Yoyong Central Museum of Culture, Mythology and Sorcery. As they sat for lunch after finishing a guided tour of the museum, a conversation that they overheard fueled the desire to seek an audience with Dinesh Bez, a master sorcerer and an astrologer. Overjoyed at getting their future predicted by the Bez, they left with contentment writ large on their faces. But their joy was short-lived. Bhaskar is found dead in the morning and Piyush is nowhere to be seen. The needle of suspicion points in the direction of the latter. But is there something more to it than meets the eye? Because a few days later, Police recover a body that they be believe is of Piyush.

Jason seems tired and restless all the time and feels as if he's doing the same thing over and over again. While awaiting his family to return from school and work, Jason finds himself tormented by the ticking of the clock, reminding him of the number of things he needs to do. Jason has been hearing the clock for weeks now. What did he need to do?

Tiana for the life of her can't remember anything, not even her family. Then the family set out to find an antidote for her amnesia. . . or so it seems Then again a lot of things are bothering her, she has the strong onus that there's something crucial she should remember, but, like the rest of her memories, it refuses to come back to her. Now she has to go through living and learning again. And of course trying to remember . . .