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The Scars Within

By Mjay

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She felt as if she were floating. Her eyes were closed, and everything about her felt soft, a luxuriating fluffiness like the satin down comforter her grandma used to have. She thought she must have been sleeping. There was a not-unpleasant heaviness to her limbs, like the time she could finally sit down after standing and walking in the market for hours.

Then her brain started to focus in a peculiar sort of way, powerless over thoughts that surfaced unbidden. Abubakar suddenly came to mind...how he had gotten her this way, and how she longed to tell Maama, but couldn't. Maama. . .

As her consciousness began to return, she tried without success to open her eyes. Something tight and sticky was holding her lids together. Now she knew she was sleeping. She'd felt that strange paralysis before when wrapped in layers of her dreams, her legs turned to lead as she ran from shadowy pursuers and her eyes became inert shutters. She was scared, what frightened her most was her breathing. Her hand blindly went to her

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Arasy

Chapter 4: thanks for the translations, it improves things so much. I am with Zamira in this one and I don't like Abubakar, my heart aches for Zeenah, but I guess it is what it is? I liked that opening paragraph in chapter 3, so true...

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Arasy

Chapter 2: I can tell the author is a good storyteller, the feeling is there. With help of an editor to correct grammar mistakes or sentence structure, this work would be wonderful!

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Arasy

Hi! I have just started this story and it's a shame we cannot leave a review for each one. Starting from the title and everything in the first lines, this is catching. The only problem I have it's that there are many words and even sentences that are not in English. I'm not sure if the readers are supposed to know everything about it already, but as I'm not familiar with the culture or religion that are part of the setting in this story, I don't enjoy having to cut my reading to go and google so many things. Perhaps the author would consider using footnotes to explain some of these things if they are important to the story?

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