Hi @NickfEast!

Thanks for requesting for a critique. 

This is a short one since I can tell you're not new to writing, and as I've said, I'm only going to provide constructive critiques to those who really need it. 

Anyways, below are my initial comments as a first time reader of your work, and some proofreading suggestions for you to make use of when you're in the editing process.

COVER:

the graphics could be better;

the font style and size of the book title / subtitle isn't very legible

BLURB corrections:

more than he thinks.

In a worst-case scenario, it might even force him

coming into a head-on collision, avoidance may not be enough.

But what if that is all one has to give?

Prologue and 1st Chapters:

From the opening paragraph alone, I can tell the author has already done well trying to establish his narrative tone. I didn't come across major issues with grammar, tense consistency, sentence structuring, etc.

The prose is impressive and shows the author put effort into his writing, but some paragraphs were tedious to read, almost to the point of consecutively info-dumping.

But I guess a number of readers will appreciate the satire more than the almost overwhelming amount of 'telling' content. (But maybe it's just my terribly short attention span talking, so, take this with a pinch of salt.)

I read through a few comma splices, run-ons, and punctuation errors but they're very minor and didn't distract me much as I read through the first chapters. Sorry I didn't have time to read everything. My apologies if this review is more on the technical aspects. It's just how I critique other people's work. 

All in all, the interesting narration and the way the author set up descriptive imagery made it a worthwhile read.

SUGGESTED CORRECTIONS:

nonconformity (no hyphen necessary)

all this...behaviour. (no space before or after an ellipsis)

better; it's just the way (a semicolon would be more appropriate)

any form of change---especially for the better. (a semicolon would be inappropriate for this sentence, or u could use an ellipsis to indicate a break in thought)

thoroughly confused, which, for a control freak of galactic proportions, is worse than outrage. (better sentence structure)

incessant light. (u could use a full stop here since the next phrase "Dick wished" isn't a tag for the previous independent clause, which i assume is an introspection by Dick)

its own mind. Run, children! (missing comma) Run while you can!

protect you now;  Ojero will finally win. (or just use a full stop/period)

a middle-aged man was perpetrating a prison break. (no comma necessary)

of everyone everywhere 'being' potentially at stake. (i think adding 'being' makes the narration flow better)

ochre-coloured (hyphen necessary)

spotted brown sandals (no hyphen necessary)

Even the ever-changing frown that he (omit the comma)

To complete the image of the scholar, he should have had a beard. (full stop)

To his great embarrassment, he had

stone desert (no hyphen necessary)

However, another thought told him the first thought (i think the word 'thought' has been repeated one time too many in this part. try replacing it with "told him the first one was just his imagination.")

principle of escaping. ('he pondered' may be omitted since you've already italicized the sentence, denoting that it is another character's introspection)

of a four-seat

Okay. I guess that's enough nitpicking for tonight. 

Hope this helped somehow.

Your friendly critic,

M